Jacki-P9

Photo Assignment Name: Atmospheric Space

Student Name: Jacki Blair

Group Name: The Snapshots



Title: Childhood

Tags: Action, atmosphere, blur, air, wind

Self Evaluation:

When taking this photo, I wanted to try and have my daughter jumping up and down on the trampoline and capture a picture of her hair blowing up and down with the air. She was not able to jump high enough for me to capture that picture. So, then I had her run circles around me, hence the name "Childhood", and I captured this photo. The background is the green bushes beind our trampoline. I love the way the colors are streaky and actually run into her face.

I attempted the panning effect for this photo. I had a lot of fun with it and love how the background turned out blurry while her face was still. I really like the colors of the background as well. I really wish she had been able to jump high enough for me to capture a picture that I had in mind, but I really like how this one turned out. (45-50 pts.) || 80 – 89% (40 - 44 pts.) || <80% (<40 pts.) || Critique Comments:
 * Category || Strong || Adequate || Weak ||
 * Concept || Does an outstanding job of communicating the concept. || Does an adequate job communicating the concept. || Does a poor job communicating the concept. ||
 * Composition || Photograph uses composition principles very effectively. || Photograph does a good job using composition principles. || Photograph does a poor job using composition principles. ||
 * Focus || Focus is a perfect match with the concept of the shot. || Focus is an adequate match with the concept of the shot. || Focus is a poor match with the concept of the shot. ||
 * Technical Aspects || Shutter speed and aperture were perfectly chosen to match concept. || Shutter speed and aperture were adequately chosen to match concept. || Shutter speed and aperture were poorly chosen and do not match the concept. ||
 * Depth of Field || Excellent use of depth-of-field. || Adequate use of depth-of-field. || Poor use of depth-of-field. ||
 * Title/tags || Title and tags were perfectly chosen and written to express the content and concept. Spelling and word choice are excellent with no mistakes. || Title and tags were adequately chosen and written to express the content and concept. Spelling and word choice are good with only minor errors. || Title and tags were poorly chosen and written to express the content and concept. Contains multiple spelling errors or wrong word choices. ||
 * ** Instructor evaluates this section ** ||
 * Self Critique || Excellent self-assessment. Written comments meet or exceed requirements. || Adequate self-assessment. Written comments meet requirements. || Poor self-assessment. Written comments do not meet requirements. ||
 * Peer Critique || Excellent peer assessment. Written comments meet or exceed requirements. || Adequate peer assessment. Written comments meet requirements. || Poor peer assessment. Written comments do not meet requirements. ||
 * Peer Comments || Peer comments exceed expectations. || Peer comments meet expectations. One or two comments might be missing. || Three or more peer comments were missing, incomplete or poorly written. ||
 * Total Points || >89%
 * Total Points || >89%

Peer Critique Name: Emily Smith (45-50 pts.) || 80 – 89% (40 - 44 pts.) || <80% (<40 pts.) || Critique Comments: Emily-Jacki, while you did a good job capturing the "space" in the background, I am definitely first drawn to the face of your little girl. I would like to see more of the atmospheric space for this shot. My only suggestion would be to try this shot without her in the picture; that would be more of a true atmospheric space photo. I think you did a good job with the technique required to blur the background of your shot. Nice job. :O)
 * Category || Strong || Adequate || Weak ||
 * Concept || Does an outstanding job of communicating the concept. || Does an adequate job communicating the concept. || Does a poor job communicating the concept. ||
 * Composition || Photograph uses composition principles very effectively. || Photograph does a good job using composition principles. || Photograph does a poor job using composition principles. ||
 * Focus || Focus is a perfect match with the concept of the shot. || Focus is an adequate match with the concept of the shot. || Focus is a poor match with the concept of the shot. ||
 * Technical Aspects || Shutter speed and aperture were perfectly chosen to match concept. || Shutter speed and aperture were adequately chosen to match concept. || Shutter speed and aperture were poorly chosen and do not match the concept. ||
 * Depth of Field || Excellent use of depth-of-field. || Adequate use of depth-of-field. || Poor use of depth-of-field.  ||
 * Title/tags || Title and tags were perfectly chosen and written to express the content and concept. Spelling and word choice are excellent with no mistakes. || Title and tags were adequately chosen and written to express the content and concept. Spelling and word choice are good with only minor errors. || Title and tags were poorly chosen and written to express the content and concept. Contains multiple spelling errors or wrong word choices. ||
 * ** Instructor evaluates this section ** ||
 * Self Critique || Excellent self-assessment. Written comments meet or exceed requirements. || Adequate self-assessment. Written comments meet requirements. || Poor self-assessment. Written comments do not meet requirements. ||
 * Peer Critique || Excellent peer assessment. Written comments meet or exceed requirements. || Adequate peer assessment. Written comments meet requirements. || Poor peer assessment. Written comments do not meet requirements. ||
 * Peer Comments || Peer comments exceed expectations. || Peer comments meet expectations. One or two comments might be missing. || Three or more peer comments were missing, incomplete or poorly written. ||
 * Total Points || >89%
 * Total Points || >89%

Donna- Jacki, I like the motion in this photograph, and I like the way you left a lot of room in front of the girl's face. I noticed the atmosphere, but I focused more on the girl as the subject of the photograph than I did on the atmosphere itself. I'm impressed with your technique in this shot.

Mike – Jacki, you did a good job of capturing atmospheric space. I, too, was drawn to the girl more than the space, though. The capture of the motion was excellently done. I’m not sure how to tell you how to improve the overall shot. If there was some way to blow the girl’s hair back (like what would happen in a forceful wind) or blur her a little bit more, it might make you change the focus from her to the atmosphere. Overall, good photo!

__Kevin__- Jacki, This picture immediately made me dizzy. Was that your intention? The swirl in the background or space is great, and I really get the feeling of being on a whirl-a-round or the like. Just for fun, some things to try would be: take out the child, I think the background itself is a great photo. If you were to have the chance to do this picture again, what is the child was blurred and the background was focused?