Emily-P9

Photo Assignment Name: Atmospheric Space

Student Name: Emily Smith

Group Name: The Snapshots



Title: Breakthrough

Tags: clouds, sunset, breakthrough, atmospheric space

I had taken a few pictures of the recent fog for this shot; however, after I photographed this break in the clouds this evening, 10/24/09, I was sure this was the best representation of atmospheric space. After a cold, windy October day, the sun made its entrance known by breaking through the fast moving clouds. I wasn't sure the sun was actually out at first; then I raced to grab my camera for this shot. I feel as though this shot totally captures an atmospheric space. I love how the gray clouds are still swirling at the top and bottom of this shot.

I took a few shots of this scene from the driveway at my parents' home. I didn't really like them. I then walked onto the deck to capture this shot. My dad hollered, "Yeah! That's the one!" :O) Although I had to use the zoom for this shot, I feel as though it captures the essence of atmospheric space. I kept my elbows in at my sides and held the shutter down to lock the shot before completely taking the picture. I think this helped me capture such a clear shot of this breakthrough. I now can feel better about taking shots that require the zoom.

Self Evaluation (45-50 pts.) || 80 – 89% (40 - 44 pts.) || <80% (<40 pts.) || Critique Comments:
 * Category || Strong || Adequate || Weak ||
 * Concept || Does an outstanding job of communicating the concept. || Does an adequate job communicating the concept. || Does a poor job communicating the concept. ||
 * Composition || Photograph uses composition principles very effectively. || Photograph does a good job using composition principles. || Photograph does a poor job using composition principles. ||
 * Focus || Focus is a perfect match with the concept of the shot. || Focus is an adequate match with the concept of the shot . || Focus is a poor match with the concept of the shot. ||
 * Technical Aspects || Shutter speed and aperture were perfectly chosen to match concept. || Shutter speed and aperture were adequately chosen to match concept. || Shutter speed and aperture were poorly chosen and do not match the concept. ||
 * Depth of Field || Excellent use of depth-of-field. || Adequate use of depth-of-field. || Poor use of depth-of-field. ||
 * Title/tags || Title and tags were perfectly chosen and written to express the content and concept. Spelling and word choice are excellent with no mistakes. || Title and tags were adequately chosen and written to express the content and concept. Spelling and word choice are good with only minor errors. || Title and tags were poorly chosen and written to express the content and concept. Contains multiple spelling errors or wrong word choices. ||
 * ** Instructor evaluates this section ** ||
 * Self Critique || Excellent self-assessment. Written comments meet or exceed requirements. || Adequate self-assessment. Written comments meet requirements. || Poor self-assessment. Written comments do not meet requirements. ||
 * Peer Critique || Excellent peer assessment. Written comments meet or exceed requirements. || Adequate peer assessment. Written comments meet requirements. || Poor peer assessment. Written comments do not meet requirements. ||
 * Peer Comments || Peer comments exceed expectations. || Peer comments meet expectations. One or two comments might be missing. || Three or more peer comments were missing, incomplete or poorly written. ||
 * Total Points || >89%
 * Total Points || >89%

Emily, I thought the fog was smoke at first. I think your picture does a nice job with this concept. I was focused on the atmosphere more than on the trees. I also like the lavender sky--very pretty. I agree with Jacki about removing the trees on the lower left of the photo. I wouldn't crop it because the fog looks great in that area, but you could sponge away the trees. Peer Critique Name: Donna Owen (45-50 pts.) || 80 – 89% (40 - 44 pts.) || <80% (<40 pts.) || Critique Comments:
 * Category || Strong || Adequate || Weak ||
 * Concept || Does an outstanding job of communicating the concept. || Does an adequate job communicating the concept. || Does a poor job communicating the concept. ||
 * Composition || Photograph uses composition principles very effectively. || Photograph does a good job using composition principles. || Photograph does a poor job using composition principles. ||
 * Focus || Focus is a perfect match with the concept of the shot. || Focus is an adequate match with the concept of the shot. || Focus is a poor match with the concept of the shot. ||
 * Technical Aspects || Shutter speed and aperture were perfectly chosen to match concept. || Shutter speed and aperture were adequately chosen to match concept. || Shutter speed and aperture were poorly chosen and do not match the concept. ||
 * Depth of Field || Excellent use of depth-of-field. || Adequate use of depth-of-field. || Poor use of depth-of-field. ||
 * Title/tags || Title and tags were perfectly chosen and written to express the content and concept. Spelling and word choice are excellent with no mistakes. || Title and tags were adequately chosen and written to express the content and concept. Spelling and word choice are good with only minor errors. || Title and tags were poorly chosen and written to express the content and concept. Contains multiple spelling errors or wrong word choices. ||
 * ** Instructor evaluates this section ** ||
 * Self Critique || Excellent self-assessment. Written comments meet or exceed requirements. || Adequate self-assessment. Written comments meet requirements. || Poor self-assessment. Written comments do not meet requirements. ||
 * Peer Critique || Excellent peer assessment. Written comments meet or exceed requirements. || Adequate peer assessment. Written comments meet requirements. || Poor peer assessment. Written comments do not meet requirements. ||
 * Peer Comments || Peer comments exceed expectations. || Peer comments meet expectations. One or two comments might be missing. || Three or more peer comments were missing, incomplete or poorly written. ||
 * Total Points || >89%
 * Total Points || >89%

Mike – Emily, I, too, saw this shot about 5:00 - 5:30 on Saturday afternoon. As you looked towards the east, this shot appeared. If you look at my submission, I included a shot comparable to this one. It looks great. The only thing I think that might make a difference is to enhance the image with Photoshop to bring out the blue sky more and to make the highlighted clouds more captivating. Overall, this photo is awesome. Very, very good!!!

__Kevin__- Emily, very nice shot of atmospheric space. It is interesting that except for the trees, you could turn this picture upside down (maybe even sideways) and no one would know. To that end, you might consider taking out the trees. Although, the one on the right adds a nice frame.

Jacki - Emily, I really like the photo that you captured. I love the softness of the clouds on such a beautiful background. I, personally love the tree on the right hand side; I think it gives the photo a point of view. The only thing that I would suggest is to take out the trees on the bottom left. Great shot!

Donna - Emily, I thought the fog was smoke at first. I think your picture does a nice job with this concept. I was focused on the atmosphere more than on the trees. I also like the lavender sky--very pretty. I agree with Jacki about removing the trees on the lower left of the photo. I wouldn't crop it because the fog looks great in that area, but you could sponge away the trees.