Emily-P3

Photo Assignment Name: Select an Assignment (Scenic Photo)

Student Name: Emily Smith

Group Name: The Snapshots

Title: Old Building

Tags: scenic, old building, overgrown, abandoned

This is a photo of an old, abandoned building close to my school. I have passed this building so many times in the last five years, so I decided to photograph it. Obviously, this is a building that has been in Coweta County for many years and probably belongs to a prominent local family. I decided to use this scenic picture so that I could use it when I discuss writing techniques with my 8th grade language arts classes at the beginning of the second nine weeks. I teach the students to view a photo and to write a truism for that photo. Every student usually has a very unique perspective on the photos, and they all usually have a very different truism for each picture. I would give them my example as well. My truism is "Don't dwell on the past." From the truism, I have them think about a time in their life that correlates to their truism, and this becomes the beginning of a writing piece. I use this technique to prove that everyone has something to write about. Self Evaluation (45-50 pts.) || 80 – 89% (40 - 44 pts.) || <80% (<40 pts.) || Critique Comments:
 * Category || Strong || Adequate || Weak ||
 * Concept || Does an outstanding job of communicating the concept . || Does an adequate job communicating the concept. || Does a poor job communicating the concept. ||
 * Composition || Photograph uses composition principles very effectively. || Photograph does a good job using composition principles. || Photograph does a poor job using composition principles. ||
 * Focus || Focus is a perfect match with the concept of the shot. || Focus is an adequate match with the concept of the shot. || Focus is a poor match with the concept of the shot. ||
 * Technical Aspects || Shutter speed and aperture were perfectly chosen to match concept. || Shutter speed and aperture were adequately chosen to match concept. || Shutter speed and aperture were poorly chosen and do not match the concept. ||
 * Depth of Field || Excellent use of depth-of-field. || Adequate use of depth-of-field. || Poor use of depth-of-field. ||
 * Title/tags || Title and tags were perfectly chosen and written to express the content and concept. Spelling and word choice are excellent with no mistakes. || Title and tags were adequately chosen and written to express the content and concept. Spelling and word choice are good with only minor errors. || Title and tags were poorly chosen and written to express the content and concept. Contains multiple spelling errors or wrong word choices. ||
 * ** Instructor evaluates this section ** ||
 * Self Critique || Excellent self-assessment. Written comments meet or exceed requirements. || Adequate self-assessment. Written comments meet requirements. || Poor self-assessment. Written comments do not meet requirements. ||
 * Peer Critique || Excellent peer assessment. Written comments meet or exceed requirements. || Adequate peer assessment. Written comments meet requirements. || Poor peer assessment. Written comments do not meet requirements. ||
 * Peer Comments || Peer comments exceed expectations. || Peer comments meet expectations. One or two comments might be missing. || Three or more peer comments were missing, incomplete or poorly written. ||
 * Total Points || >89%
 * Total Points || >89%

Peer Critique Name: Mike (45-50 pts.) || 80 – 89% (40 - 44 pts.) || <80% (<40 pts.) || Critique Comments:
 * Category || Strong || Adequate || Weak ||
 * Concept || Does an outstanding job of communicating the concept. || Does an adequate job communicating the concept. || Does a poor job communicating the concept. ||
 * Composition || Photograph uses composition principles very effectively. || Photograph does a good job using composition principles. || Photograph does a poor job using composition principles. ||
 * Focus || Focus is a perfect match with the concept of the shot. || Focus is an adequate match with the concept of the shot. || Focus is a poor match with the concept of the shot. ||
 * Technical Aspects || Shutter speed and aperture were perfectly chosen to match concept. || Shutter speed and aperture were adequately chosen to match concept. || Shutter speed and aperture were poorly chosen and do not match the concept. ||
 * Depth of Field || Excellent use of depth-of-field. || Adequate use of depth-of-field. || Poor use of depth-of-field. ||
 * Title/tags || Title and tags were perfectly chosen and written to express the content and concept. Spelling and word choice are excellent with no mistakes. || Title and tags were adequately chosen and written to express the content and concept. Spelling and word choice are good with only minor errors. || Title and tags were poorly chosen and written to express the content and concept. Contains multiple spelling errors or wrong word choices. ||
 * ** Instructor evaluates this section ** ||
 * Self Critique || Excellent self-assessment. Written comments meet or exceed requirements. || Adequate self-assessment. Written comments meet requirements. || Poor self-assessment. Written comments do not meet requirements. ||
 * Peer Critique || Excellent peer assessment. Written comments meet or exceed requirements. || Adequate peer assessment. Written comments meet requirements. || Poor peer assessment. Written comments do not meet requirements. ||
 * Peer Comments || Peer comments exceed expectations. || Peer comments meet expectations. One or two comments might be missing. || Three or more peer comments were missing, incomplete or poorly written. ||
 * Total Points || >89%
 * Total Points || >89%

Other Comments: Jacki - Emily, I really like your picture. I love how you have captured the overgrown plants surrounding the abandoned building. The one suggestion that I have is to have the building more in focus so that it stands out more. I love how it looks as though the trees are swallowing the building!

Mike - Emily, I love the fact that beauty can be found in objects that many of us take for granted. I also love the way that you composed your picture. The building's placement follows the rule of thirds, if you look closely at it. The building is the first thing you notice. I also like the way the foreground objects are a little softer focused and the building and tree are sharper. I'm not sure if the day was bright and sunny or slightly overcast, but you compensated for it in your aperture and shutter settings (they still give me some problems in my pictures). **On a personal note - I love old stuff and things in the past (must be my love of history!)** Good photo!!

Kevin- Emily, this is a beautiful photo. Besides the scenery, I think the lighting is just right as it gives the impression of the moment. You have formed the photo well in terms of placement of the building in the space. I would experiment with zooming in a bit and cropping to accentuate the building, but that would mostly be an alternative.

Donna- Emily, I think I've seen this building before. I like old, rustic setting, such as this one. I think you did a nice job with Rule of Thirds, and I like the way the eye is drawn to the red from the barn. I would like to see the photo darkened a bit or transformed to sepia or black and white.